still in its infancy but i love how its coming along. got to add some pr stories aswell
plz give me somefeed back and let me know how good the content is and what other features i shuld be adding
WAR Republic | Stories from the Front Lines
check out my war stories blog
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Cossack
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Re: check out my war stories blog
Well, first fix the website. I would love to see everything in the middle of the screen.
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Darman1138
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Re: check out my war stories blog
The banner at the top is waaaaay too big. Takes up too much room. You're also going to want to work on your grammar.
Original text: "we got about 1/2 way to obj 1 and got ambushed by opfor lightarmor. the opfor armor was behind trees firing on friendly’s all around me."
Edited text: "We got about 1/2 way to Objective Alpha and were ambushed by OpFor light armor. The OpFor armor was behind trees firing on us."
This also left me wondering which direction the armor was coming from. I'd include directions in there just for depth for the reader. You aren't doing this for the military so you don't have to be accurate, but it just sounds better if it would say: "The OpFor armor started firing on us from the treeline to the North."
Just my opinions.
Original text: "we got about 1/2 way to obj 1 and got ambushed by opfor lightarmor. the opfor armor was behind trees firing on friendly’s all around me."
Edited text: "We got about 1/2 way to Objective Alpha and were ambushed by OpFor light armor. The OpFor armor was behind trees firing on us."
This also left me wondering which direction the armor was coming from. I'd include directions in there just for depth for the reader. You aren't doing this for the military so you don't have to be accurate, but it just sounds better if it would say: "The OpFor armor started firing on us from the treeline to the North."
Just my opinions.
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